Rascal

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February 5, 2004

Categories: Drabbles & Shorts, Het, Pirates of the Caribbean

Rating: PG.

Fandom/Spoilers: Pirates of the Caribbean.

Summary: Jack/Elizabeth. A little rum and conversation.

Disclaimer: Disney, not me.

Notes: For the pirates500 challenge: Take one of the following words and use it as your theme: rain, rum, ruin, rascal.

They collapsed on the beach. The moon shone down. The surf pounded the shore. Jack was drunk. Elizabeth was sober.

Jack put his arm around Elizabeth's shoulders. She leaned her head against him. The night was warm. The rum was sweet. She'd had a taste. Just one. Just two.

But Jack was drunk. Very drunk. Elizabeth looked up at him. His eyes glittered in the moonlight. She tried to count the beads in his hair. He seemed to like shiny things, like a magpie. It suited him.

Jack was talking. Talking about freedom. Talking about loneliness. About the sea. About rum. Elizabeth had another taste. The rum was warm, like the night, like the fire. Like Jack.

Elizabeth was listening to Jack's voice. It was slurred. It was wistful.

Elizabeth smiled at Jack. Jack smiled back. The fire burned. Jack leaned in to kiss Elizabeth. Elizabeth pushed him away.

"Mr Sparrow! If you think that I would kiss a rogue such as yourself, then you are gravely mistaken."

"But all the--" he gestured vaguely, "--the moon and the rum."

"It would take more than a pretty moon and a bottle of rum for me to allow such liberties from a cad."

"Cad?"

"Yes, cad. Scoundrel. Recreant. Wastrel. Reprobate."

"No," said Jack. "Pirate."

"Rake, knave, rapscallion, miscreant, blackguard."

"Clearly," Jack said, "one of us is in error. As a -- what did you call me?"

"Blackguard."

"As a blackguard and a gentleman, we will assume for now that it is me."

"Not a gentleman," Elizabeth said. "That's the whole point."

"And a pirate can't be a gentleman?"

Elizabeth thought. "I suppose he can."

"But not me."

"No," Elizabeth said. "Not you."

"Ah, because a gentleman wouldn't kiss you, is that it?"

"Exactly."

"Just so we're clear," Jack said and upended his bottle.

He didn't try to kiss her again. Elizabeth was disappointed.

Jack slept. Elizabeth didn't.

FINIS

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.....um trying to find a way to reply to this fic...well written and you made a possiable connect! i like it even though i don't really like a jack and elizabeth connection the fic was short and good which counter acts the jack elizabeth connection...did any of that make sense@_@

queeneb @ March 06, 2004

Hiya,

Just read this and wanted to say that I really enjoyed it. You managed to capture both of the characters perfectly. Jack's an elusive little bugger to write at times, but I could visualise him saying your dialogue. Good, neat little scene that says a lot with a few words. Very impressive.

Linda @ March 13, 2004

Really good characterisation of Jack and Elizabeth, who are pretty hard in my opinion to write for. Great. Really short and sweet and true. I could imagine it.

Ervi @ April 21, 2004

I liked it alot! Twas a shame it was sooooooo short! Write more will ya?!
I loved the way you worded this piece. You have a talent for writing, I can tell you! Keep it up and please, keep on writing Jack/Elizabeth stories; not many people do!

Mannie @ October 04, 2004

great story!! i always thought what the story would be like if jack and elizabeth really got together. i would still love him though! (sighs at the thought of being elizabeth in that scene)

Roxanne @ November 24, 2004

I thought that your story was boring and not worthy of remembrance. Coming from a frequent fan fiction reader, I understand that you're trying, but maybe you should stop writing altogether. Better luck next time!

Rochelle<3

Rochelle @ January 07, 2005

OMG please don't listen to her (Rochelle)! She left a very nasty comment, didn't she? And please NEVER STOP WRITING! Well, that was my banter, I enjoyed this, but I do enjoy everything you write, some more than others. I'd like to see more Jack/Elizabeth, maybe some more Jack/Will perhaps too?

Shayn @ March 22, 2005

Love. Lovelovelove. Love.

Anna @ April 11, 2005

That was great! I am sad that it is short, but it was to the point.

Spi @ July 27, 2006

I thought it was really good and please write more, never stop!

Electra @ August 13, 2006

I thought it was really good and please write more, never stop!

Electra @ August 13, 2006

Sheez, what is with the people leaving shitty comments about your stories? What an awesome abuse of the power of anonymity and the ability to spell. I hope Rochelle's ability to write withers like the hands of a mummy.

On to better topics. You've pegged the essence of the ley line that runs between Jack and Elizabeth, I think. I won't say, Oh, she hates it but she really wants him, because I don't think that's it; nor is it that she ONLY wants the life Jack symbolizes. It's that, whatever else they may have in common, whatever untold desires they share, Jack sleeps soundly at night, at peace with them; Elizabeth doesn't.

This fic, particularly with the rhythm of the narration, is cheery, as Jackfics usally are. But it's also a vicious little thing, and smarts a bit, particularly for those of us who, like Elizabeth, aren't quite as easy with ourselves and the things we thought we wanted.

Thanks for writing; I appreciate it.

The Scarlet Pervygirl @ August 14, 2006

PLEEEEAAAAASEEEEEEEE WRIGHT MORE!!!!!!!!! I HAVE BEEN SEARCH THE WEB FOR A MONTH FOR A GOOD JACK/ELIZABETH STORY. but next time a teensie bit longer and a little more love drama.

P.S. NO i am not a sicko just a semmie crazed fan that i no good at writing

SXHNGRY @ August 16, 2006

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