Halrloprillalar

This sucked! i can't believe you wou;d have Draco kill Harry! Shame!

Stephanie @ October 02, 2003

I agree with stephanie that sucked!!!!!

@ October 04, 2003

Ignore them, it was good and heartbreaking. I think I need a smoke after reading that. It's not hot, but poignant.

Amber in wonderland @ October 04, 2003

it would have been better if they had shagged first

@ October 16, 2003

I like it. Nice and creepy in a very real way. And it would not have been better if they'd shagged. It wouldn't have made the knife twist quite so well in the reader's back...

Anaid @ November 02, 2003

I agree with Anaid. I would have LOVED to see them shagg.

Mrs.SiriusBlack @ November 21, 2003

It SUCKED! write something that actually is good moron! Harry would not have DRACO to kill him and i am in a fantasy of where Draco and Harry love eachother so don't spoil that for me!

Becky @ November 25, 2003

Squee!
I love your Harry. He's so...Harry. They're both in character, and even though the title made me expect pr0n, I loffed it mightily.

Juliette @ November 25, 2003

Grr....thatb sucked!! what's wrong w/ you?!?! you should be harry in this fic! Grr.....

Stevie @ January 12, 2004

^ Wow, new meaning of the word "constructive criticism" o___0

I thought it was a little bit on the short side, maybe there could be a little more tension if it was a bit longer. Otherwise it was heartbreaking.

Ylva @ January 19, 2004

Wow, the comments on this fic are almost amusing, but not quite. Just because *you* have a fantasy about Draco/Harry doesn't mean everyone else does.

i agree with Ylva, there could be more tension and more of a backstory. As well as Anaid, if they had shagged you could feel the betrayal much more.

Ignore the idiots that just say "LEIK OMG U SUKK CUZ THAT WOULD NEVA HAPEN OMG!!1111oneone", because it's highly unlikely that Harry and Draco would shag in the books, either. Keep writing!

Owlie @ January 20, 2004

erm.... no. no, they should have shagged.

Jessica @ January 30, 2004

I loved how it was so blunt. It really shocked me. I am in utter awe. O_O I'll be thinking about this for days. It's the perfect amount of words. (Once again.. beautiful.) ;_;

Ashez @ February 03, 2004

Wow. That was really good. And more than slightly disturbing. Harry seemed to have a very strangely sudden change of heart, though.

Altogether very very wonderful.

midnight succubus @ February 03, 2004

Disturbing. Hang your head, shame on you.

Lillibloom @ February 14, 2004

There is only so much you can do with 100 words and I happened to like what you did!

Angelina Brown @ February 21, 2004

I loved it! The ending was sublime. I love the idea that their relationship is not something akin to cheesy paperback romances. And honestly, if they had shagged..it would have detracted from the ending, IMHO. Plus, you had a word limit.

Kudos to you.

Haru @ February 27, 2004

That was... different. Weirdly disturbing; very blunt. It was, however, extremely well written and causes no small amout of wibbling.

I'm kind of shocked by some of the comments left here, telling you that 'it sucked'. How rude. Can these people not actually appreciate the exquisite writing that is ~so~ hard to put into a drabble, but that you have mananged perfectly. You should be proud, and you should ~definitely~ ignore them. Which I'm sure you have done, but still...

Very good. I like it a lot. How the Room of Requirment caused Harry's immediate acceptance of Draco and... ooh. ::shivers::

Siobhan @ February 29, 2004

Ooh... sorry to double post, but I just got the significance of the title. 'First come, first served'; Draco was there first, so the Room provided him with what he needed to kill Harry; a weapon, and Harry himself.

Very, ~very~ good. :)

Siobhan @ February 29, 2004

Damn, but this fandom is fully of brainless, shrieking H/D twatlings. (see ^^^^ above)

As usual, your cleverness astounds and impresses.

K. @ March 06, 2004

Please if you ever write again include SLASH!!!!!

dracoluciuspotter @ March 10, 2004

I saw this on hp100 first, and loved it. A perfect drabble - mananges to incorporate plot, characterisation, a beautifully sly dig at the H/D fangirls and a killer twist. Love it.

Raven @ April 07, 2004

Hm, it's creepy, I like it.

The little shits that are flaming you need to grow up, seriously. And grow a backbone and leave your email addys. Haha.

I'm reading basically all of your H/D fics, and Draco fics but woah. I like it when Draco betrays Harry.
How very Slytherin of him.

But I must admit it's still sad the way Harry suddenly trusts Draco then gets a knife in him.

But spooky. I would've liked if it had more depth, but you can't be to detailed with 100 words, ne?

Kitty @ May 13, 2004

i have someone here who has posted an earlier comment: Lillibloom - She disagree's with herself! So there u go, thats a first you no wot she sed 2 me afta reading all the comments! " I disagree with myself!" Hehehe! lol sorry i am extremely sad! Oh and go draco we luv u, u evil git!

d evil squirrel! @ June 03, 2004

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! OMG! HOW COULD DRACO DO THAT! THAT WAS(sorry I have to say this) THE WORST STORY I HAVE EVER READ! *sits down and cries*

@ June 04, 2004

Dude, i think it suked.they need 2 shag!!!!
and dude, dont kill off harry.i agree with becky.
And dude, GET A GRIP, DRACO AND HARRY LOVE EACH OTHER, THATS WHY IYS CALLED HARRY/DRACO!!!!!!!!!

kat @ June 14, 2004

Oh Gosh, this is beautiful from start to end!. So real, I mean I got a big shock, but it's great. I've killed Draco, but never Potter. Lovely.

Karla @ June 15, 2004

M'lady, you rock!

Inarae @ June 27, 2004

It somehow seems like a parody of everything ever written and a new way of writing all at once. You sure have a way with endings. -whistles-

Annie @ June 27, 2004

I am slightly indiciceve about this fic. One one hand it was very heartwarming to know that Harry died dooing some thing that brought thim comfort. But on the other hand Draco will live forver with the guilt of killing some who loved him

The person who loves reading draco/harry intimate love (and shaging between them) fic @ July 01, 2004

Hmmm... this fic was hard for me to think on, and my first reaction was to pout and cry (mainly for the fact that I love Harry/Draco fanfiction), but after reading some of the other comments on this, I realized that whether or not the plot agrees with me does not detract from the story. So (after getting over myself) I can only think of this fic as wonderful, and extremely well done considering the limits placed on it. In fact, it is one of the best drabbles I've read. (And as a personal little rant, two people do not need to 'shag' immediately in order to show their love, and people are not rabbits, most do not randomly jump someone, especially not someone who is -as in this story line- an enemy. If that's what you're looking for, there are plenty of PWPs out there for you.) *ahem* So, *presents smiley-face sticker... er... personal seal of approval!* good job!

Alicia @ July 20, 2004

Wow Draco is an evil git in a fanfic...O_o..... Oh no it can't be...(by the way that was a bit of sily sarcasm)
I liked it. Harry (it seemed to me)was all prepared for love and kisses and Draco sliding the knife home made me blink at what happened then giggle slightly at the sudden surreal feeling I got from the fact that Draco didn't boink harry nor kiss him in a fanfic... *pauses waiting for the author to crack and have it all be some silly nightmare of Harry's*... Truly?
Totally Great!!! I thought it was fantastic.

~BlackCat9

BlackCat9 @ August 03, 2004

And now that I have read a few reviews I am getting slightly annoyed on your behalf for these twits who can't realize that you never said this was going to be a Harry/Draco story, It was just said that they were characters.
You killed Potter off. Kudos to you I've been waiting for someone to get the...ahem... courage to do it and make it seem even vaguely realistic and not a heroic death.
I thought it was fabulously written even though Harry's motivation confused me slightly. Did he actually expect Draco to kill him or was he thinking love. It seemed like love to me and Draco (being the ya know SON OF A DEATH EATER!) killed him as he got the chance.... Oh well that's just my humble opinion...lol

~BlackCat9

BlackCat9 @ August 03, 2004

Wow! I thought that was a perfectly written little killer of a story. I can't believe all the people who flamed you! I too am a lover of the Draco/Harry pairing and 'my' D/H would never kill each other (I'm the fluffy type) but I found your story totally convincing. Draco is very canon - and Harry too, actually. There's an amazing moment before your last line when the heart leaps with the sudden hope that Draco _is_ all that Harry needs and wants, then you crush that beautifully. Fantastic. Heartbreaking.

Tenar @ August 24, 2004

o0
Wow. Um, that was unexpected. Creepy.

Shikala @ September 07, 2004

I liked it; it was very unexpected and sly. And Becky, oh, dear, dear. Namecalling doesn't suit you. Next time, try squalling and hurling some of your own feces, eh? Somehow, seeing someone with all the grammatical savvy of a sick fish trying to insult someone's intelligence is very funny. I'd insult Kat, too, just for fun, except I'm pretty sure she's trying to make fun of Becky. Or, possibly, she drank a little too much oven cleaner this morning.

Your writing is very good, and I liked the story. All of the criticism you've gotten here was complete bullshit, to use the vernacular; constructive criticism avoids pointless insults and negligible personal opinions. I.e., a story is not horrible simply because it didn't go the way the reader wished; unfortunately, most of your angered readers are probably not quite capable of writing their own fictions, so they depend on you to write down everything they want for them. Also, the English language generally relies on little things called 'words', and it's usually a good idea if one uses these things to express oneself-- some of the people reviewing here are uniquely gifted in that they can split morphemes.

Apologies for my snarkiness, dear author; I mean to compliment you, not poke at your unfortunate readers. I should really be congradulating them that they can read at all! It's just that insulting little fools with empty heads is such a great deal of fun, and you don't deserve the idiotic criticism. Now, I'm off to read your other works.

Aileen Asphodel @ September 15, 2004

ARGH!
NO dammit >.<
Greatly written but WHY???
hehe Loved it all the same ^^

Lifelessmidget @ September 25, 2004

THAT SUCKED I HATED IT UUUUUUUUUUUH THAT WAS SO STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!! IT SUCKED SUCKED SUCKED

katina @ October 31, 2004

Uhm, that was really creepy. I agree with what some of the others have said in that you should have made this longer. I had to have Katina explain it to me! Why would Draco want to kill Harry? However, if your intent was to seriously creep out your readers, you did an amazing job.

luvya
Marie

p.s. Ignore Katina, she doesn't really hate it that much, she was just in shock. *Sigh* some people don't know good writers when they see one.

Marie @ October 31, 2004

You people are dumbasses. This fic was not "Harry/Draco", it was "Harry, Draco"
...It means it involves both of them, but is not slash.

You people are so fucking immature and can't even appreciate good writing. Just because it didn't involve slash doesn't mean it wasn't a very good piece of work.

I really liked this, and the twist at the end.
I also loved the title and how it worked with the story.

Ignore the pricks up there. ^^ They don't know what they're talking about.

Lauren. @ January 01, 2005

Oh, and I agree it could have been longer, but I realize you were going for a drabble, so yeah.

And duh. Draco's always wanted to kill Harry. Why wouldn't he now?

Very nice.

Lauren. @ January 01, 2005

Ooh. And I'm posting yet again.

But I had a thought. Maybe they had been together or something, but Draco had been using Harry for Voldemort. OoO.

Lauren. @ January 01, 2005

Oh for god's sake what is wrong with these people? 'omg that totally suked i hate it i hate it i hate it i want to kill you blah blah blah'.

It was very creepy and unexpected but pretty amazing. In 100 words that was fantastic! And a note to all the people bitching - even if you didn't like it, why do you have to be so rude? People put time and effort into writing these things then have the confidence to post it. They don't do it so you can put them down and yell about how much you hate it. Try and be a little more gracious and uhhh nice, have we heard of that word?

As for the author, you rock - don't let these pathetic whiners put you off.

Pip @ February 13, 2005

Stop saying it sucked, because it didn't. It was really sad, really heartrending, and almost disappointing, but those elements ADD to the story. I personally think that it rocks in a really depressing way.

Jumato @ February 13, 2005

Ahaha. That's histerical. I totally relate to Harry.
"Love me!"
*stab*
I seriously think that's my sense of humor in a nutshell. And then all the fluffy h/d shippers crying over it. Aw man, that sleighs me. I don't know if this was supposed to be angsty, but I'm laughing so hard I might pull something.
Brilliant.

Aline @ March 09, 2005

Ignore the grammatically-incorrect gits. It was well-written, succint and memorable.

Who cares if they didn't fuck like bunnies?

Alex @ April 02, 2005

rand0m and gorgeous. don't let the jackasses getcha down.
left me shocked and giggly lol.

Jessica @ April 26, 2005

Haha, I'm so with Aline.

I started reading your fiction for your fiction, then I started rereading it, thinking it was for the hilarious glimpse at the kind of feedback HP writers get (I shudder to think what it would be like if you were situated at ff.net!), but every time I get to one of your incredibly subtle kick-in-the-groin endings, I remember that I am, in fact, reading your fiction for your fiction.

Still, the flamers are quite entertaining. I guess that's what you get for subverting so many fandom cliches with such skill and frequency!!!

Hahahaha @ April 26, 2005

when i saw this was "draco, harry" rather than "draco/harry," i was worried, and i was right. all i can say is...ouch. that hurt. SO well done, though. harry wanted draco, and draco just wanted to kill harry. pain pain pain...*dies*

do ignore the flamers. it was very good.

elsie @ April 27, 2005

oh, sweet jesus. beautiful, heartbreaking, quite surprising. a triumph. and i think i need to go outside and screech because of the utter shock of it all.

moriah @ May 19, 2005

Wow. That was.. Yeah. It made me nauseous in just the right way.. That stomach lurch right as I hit the last line. It was just like a knife in the chest, just like it should be. Awesome.

Ashe @ June 03, 2005

That's so mean! I love it.

@ July 27, 2005

Wow... this seems to be your most controversial story ever. There is only so much one can write in 100 words, yet this is poignant and heart-breaking. We all know how much Harry wanted to be loved and we know that Draco is backstabbing (hehe), so the story is so into character. I love the title as well. It was shocking because I never thought it would end like it did. lovely work.

and please people, its called 'constructive critism' not flames. "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all" keep it in mind!

-- lianna --

Lianna @ August 28, 2005

I loved it, I'm not very good at expressing that without gushing. However that is my favorite ending ever Harry dying do to excess emotions or whatever it is that makes him so heedless. And Draco killing him without bating an eyelash was amazing.
All the flames that lack a decent reason for existing are as bad as the ones I've read from the antislash peoples on your other fics. If it's slash it has been listed as such if it isn't then it is not. Is it really that hard to read that information? Hopefully this is clearer than the “,” instead of the “/” is.

fanficfinatic @ October 02, 2005

I loved it. I enjoyed the shortness of it. I think it added to the bluntness of the twist. The only part I can see a need for anything more is Harry's jump into believing that Draco is what he is looking for. Bit of a beat change there that seemed a bit jumpy. Other than that I would say very well done indeed

Swanky @ November 05, 2005

Wow... that was powerful, Harry was so desperate to kill Voldemort, and Draco was so evil... Wow.

@ December 03, 2005

so tragic and beautiful. i utterly enjoyed it.

@ January 01, 2006